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<\/figure>\n<\/figure>\n\n\n\nThe other two scenes processed but wern’t made due to time constraints<\/em><\/p>\n\n\n\n Erik wrote the story understandably and I could easily parse the information as well as use the purple highlights to elaborate on the story my own way.<\/p>\n\n\n\n With that being said I should’ve recognised that his story was quite ambitious for a two month project. At the start everything felt possible and outlining the story made it seem even more so. But I failed to consider things like item descriptions and sprites for the game which ended up making the workload tougher than anticipated. <\/p>\n\n\n\n The core problem of the game is that you lost the trust of the people you depend on. You need them to cooperate. It’s important to define the purpose of you playing the game at the start.<\/p>\n\n\n\n However, Erik also mentioned a lot of the pre-story. There was context of how the characters behave, and the purposes of them going to hike. I didn’t want to skip over that so I made (what i thought was) a brief description of what the story was about.<\/p>\n\n\n\n END OF INTRO (but still more dialogue)<\/p>\n\n\n\n This sounded good. The real result: too much! It was a huge mistake. The play-test on the 19th of March concluded that everyone thought the intro was too long-winded and just wanted to play the game: In addition, the Intro was extended because of the usage of AI to add more context. Read more here: After the feedback, I decided that less is clearly more. I minimised the starting dialouge and This was just a hook into talking to Sierra. I wanted the audience to question what is happening for some intrigue. I limited myself at the start to 3 lines and then the transitional 2 into the game.<\/p>\n\n\n\n I knew Sierra would explain the context of their situation when they stopped running, so I limited myself to 5 lines of explanation, each having their own purpose. Whilst when you talk with Marcus, you should be able to guess he’s good at foraging.<\/p>\n\n\n\n In total, there was much less dialogue, yet it was more engaging whilst letting you play the game earlier. Feedback<\/a><\/p>\n\n\n\n According to Eriks GDD, confronting their own flaws and forgiving eachother would be the main way the problem is resolved in the narrative. Generally, the flaw of our characters came by because of a lack of communication. Tyler, being the main character, has the biggest flaw: overly independent and doesn’t ask for help. Sierra’s and Marcus’ flaws are secondary (Sierra admits to lying to Tyler and Macus actually speaks up for himself). So at the start of the game, Tyler is treated roughly not only because of the bear, but also because he acts only for his needs. As he proves that he wants their survival too, Sierra starts feeling guilty that Tyler is capable to admit his mistakes, whilst she keeps her lie with her. As Marcus watches Tyler become more friendly (but still clueless) he becomes more confident to help him out, overcoming his fear of speaking up. It is important to not solely use the reputation bar as a gauge to how the characters behave towards you. The characters should change their dialogue towards you so you know you’re going on the right track. This is most noticable in the reuptation system where they behave certain ways towards you depending on your ‘rep’. Everytime you start talking to the characters, they’ll say a one liner to reflect their feelings towards you. They become less dismissive towards the player as their rep increases. There will be a new choice given to you from both Sierra and Marcus at 20 rep to show you’ve gained a degree of trust.<\/p>\n\n\n\n In the Feedback<\/a>, Jess said it was satisfying to see the change of the characters and intuitive to know how to make them happier. <\/p>\n\n\n\n Covering the names in your the script shouldn’t stop you understanding on who’s speaking<\/a>. Defining my characters by how they speak meant emphasising their key personality traits. Sierra is expressive, Tyler is overly calm \/ apathetic and Marcus is reserved. This is the default way of which the characters will talk. <\/p>\n\n\n\n Here I have removed all name mentions. Even so, the characters or at least the tones are still easily distinguishable.<\/p>\n\n\n Although the writing alone should convey who is speaking, I have changed the formatting of the writing to suit all the characters better. Namely, Sierra is the only one who ever spoke in capitals and Marcus is so reserved that sometimes he doesn’t speak with capital letters where it would’ve been gramatically correct to do so. <\/p>\n\n\n\n The Devils tooth blood mushroom was important for the first scene to both lighthen Marcus up as well as release some of Sierras tension. If Tyler gives it to Marcus, he starts to understand how knowledgable Marcus really is compared to him. He reflects that understanding to Sierra, slowly coming to terms that he should stop being so solo.<\/p>\n\n\n\n Tyler has a revalation with Sierra when he admits he doesn’t know what he is doing. This conversation happens after Tyler consults to Marcus about the blood mushroom he found. Sierra finds out that Tyler is talking to expert Marcus on how to survive and is put in a little more ease. This because Tyler is finally not doing things on his own and acting less spomtanously. This is relieving when as they depend on Tyler for their survival.<\/p>\n\n\n\n Note all my Research for Foraging in the Pacfic Northwest<\/a> was included because it wouldn’t have affected the story much. Even if I managed to add every berry I have written about, it was also additional workload for my team. I wanted to be concious and know what I was adding is important enought to be everyones problem. Occasionally and when Sierra is angry, there wouldve been “choices” you can click which would have disappeared almost instantly as though Sierra cut you off from your decision. It further emphasises the type of character Sierra is.<\/p>\n\n\n\n In scene 2, Sierra and Marcus have already sprayed themselves with wolf repellent, which can give the player a speculation that they don’t want Tyler to survive. This didn’t make too much sense however, but the drama is fun. <\/p>\n\n\n\n I wish there was more emphasis of Tyler being a poet and Sierra being a publisher. There was one moment where Tyler reaches in close proximity to the abandoned campsite, he instantly gets an idea to continue his developing story and mentions that Sierra would have loved it. Of course, that file got corrupted as inkle does that. Using Twine and Inkle<\/a><\/p>\n\n\n\n Sierra is physcially very strong (she pulled Tyler out of the ditch) but I dismissed a good reason why she is useful for the team. It is obvious why Tyler may need Marcus, but because I wrote that Sierra damaged her wrist, she couldn’t have helped out as much. Because the story is a bit spiritual, there could’ve been some healing plant Tyler finds and Marcus Identifies for Sierra perhaps.<\/p>\n\n\n\n All together, enjoyed writing. My proudest step I took was to scrap the intro idea. I think my writing becae a lot more effective since it was rooted in the dialouge. I think I fell into the trap where everything of the characters should be mentioned, but tthat either creates a long narrtive or unnatural exposition. I liked setting myself limits to keep speech shorter, as it forced me to densen my dialouge with context creatively. Not only I liked it, but people continued playing the game because my writing became more intergrated in it.<\/p>\n\n\n\n Research for Narrative<\/a><\/p>\n\n\n\n Twine and Inkle<\/a><\/p>\n\n\n\n Feedback<\/a><\/p>\n\n\n\n Homepage : Alt F4<\/a><\/p>\n<\/div><\/div>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":" Translating the Narrative I tried to highlight the entirety of Erik’s story using a Key. This key helped clearly define what is important in the story as well as consider alternative progressions. 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Team communications and AI use.<\/a><\/p>\n\n\n\nThe new intro<\/h3>\n\n\n\n
and had to fit all the context that is needed throughout the gameplay and first interactions with Marcus and Sierra. Every line counted, which mad a more intentional telling of the story:<\/p>\n\n\n\n![\"\"](\"https:\/\/sites.wsagames.com\/am3n24\/wp-content\/uploads\/sites\/54\/2026\/05\/image-6.png\")
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Tyler will help both Sierra’s and Marcus’ resolve. The correct way to treat Sierra would be to forgive her when she admits her flaw, relieving her from her anxiety. The correct way to treat Marcus’ would be not to speak over him, which happened many times over the intro, making him feel like he has no position to be there. Once he becomes comfortable, he becomes to intellect of the team.
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Aside from not being able to finish the story, there were smaller things I wanted to add the the story to help the player understand the situation and characters more:<\/p>\n\n\n\n\n
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